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Edited Paragraph (Conclusion):
Not only do both myths deemphasize the role of women, but also "The Origin of Japan and her people" devalues the importance of nature. Ironically, the Iroquois value nature but subjugate women, even though nature's prime symbol is mother nature. Mother nature provides for them, "From her head grew the corn, the beans, and the squash- 'our supporters, the three sisters'" (Iroquois 2). Although the Iroquois couldn't survive without Mother Nature for she provides them with food and nourishment, women are still considered of lesser value. The importance of women only mattered when it came to childbearing, even though it was laborious and dangerous. After the girl in the story sees the West Wind, she faints, and "[a]fter a while, they knew that the girl was to bear a child. They did not know it, but the girl was to bear twins." Women in the Iroquoian culture also didn't always have consent for who they wanted to marry or fornicate with. It is a job that they must obey. The poor treatment of women spread throughout the world, and can still be seen in society in today. Many religions, and people, still believe it is the woman's job to care for her husband, and provide children. They are still degraded, along with nature, even in the modern age we live in. People seem to forget the nature and women both provide us with life, something that cannot be replaced.

Writing Goals for Next Essay:
I am going to focus on using present tense on my next essay. I willl force myself because I never learned that past tense was.. NO IS.. a bad thing to do. I think teachers may have told me, but I never got points off so I didn't learn. I want to have 3 or less past tense phrases in my next essay since on this essay I had a lot.